TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is indubitably axiomatic that education is of vital importance in the development of any country, and university professors play a crucial role in the prosperity of every society. If university professors are in a good mood, they do all their best to provide some benefits to the education system and also to the society. While there are some people holding the idea that the virtue of increasing their wage is not clear, I, personally speaking, believe that to increase the quality of education, it is essential that their salaries get expanded. The vital aspects of this increase are demonstrated a great number of issues, among which higher motivation and better research results are of great consequences, which are discussed hereunder.
The first reason which should be stated here is that by rising university professors’ salary, their incentive gets increased dramatically. As everyone knows, money plays a very important role in our modern world and is determinative to derive a benefit and provide a convenient life. University professors, like other people, occupy the job primarily to gain materialistic advantages, and a rise in their income increase their incentive to keep going to improve both their own and also their students’ knowledge. In addition, they will concentrate on their main career, which is teaching, and are no longer concern about their personal expenses. For example, one of my professors, who is recruited recently, take a part-time job in a petrochemical company and spend some of his time to consult this company to earn extra pay. As a result, he does not have enough time to provide useful assignments for the students and give us repeated assignments for which there are solutions. In this situation, it is crystal clear that we cannot fully grasp our study. As can be seen from the abovementioned facts, not rising the salary of university professors directly affect the quality of education.
The other point which deserves some words here is that most of the university professors have a concern about their research centers. Actually, they dedicate most of their time in their research laboratory and put all their efforts to walk through the knowledge boundary. Generally speaking, they do not have sufficient money to purchase suitable equipment and come up with obsolete stuff. Therefore, the students are not able to get familiar with recent technological advances in universities. While giving money to the professors, they spend some of this money for their research centers. For instance, we did not have a special equipment in our laboratory to analyze different components of air pollution, and consequently, we had a lack of knowledge about this area of science. Last year, when our university increased my supervisor's income, he purchased an accurate analyzer. Consequently, we published several papers in the best scientific journals. Had university not increased our professors'salary, we would not have understood the concept of air pollution.
To sum up, regarding all of the aforementioned reasons, I am in consummate accord with the notation that university professors' salary should be increased. Not only is it a notable motivation for them to teach better, but it also provides merits for them to make better research facilities. To have a better education system, it is proposed to keep university professors satisfied.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 622, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'special equipment'.
Suggestion: special equipment
... centers. For instance, we did not have a special equipment in our laboratory to analyze different ...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... air pollution. To sum up, regarding all of the aforementioned reasons, I am in consumm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2864.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28413284133 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07946347174 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50184501845 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 927.9 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0234722771 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.333333333 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145295810225 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463099060839 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408640731778 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950404957795 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131228052585 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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