Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people are more giving prominence to the opinions of celebrities. However, it is vague whether the opinions of famous individuals are important to just young people or it is even important to older ones. As far as I am concerned, I think that young people take the opinions of celebrities more seriously. In what follows, I will explain my point of view.
The first point that should be stated here is that young people are more receptive to what celebrities convey than older people are. People in their young ages do not still find their personal characteristics. Indeed, each incident like reading a book, watching a movie, or reviewing the comments of a famous person on a news may be a turning point in their lives. On the other hand, older people would experience smooth or even no changes through their lives and just consider each moment of their lives a gift to enjoy more. For example, I remember when I was studying for the university entrance exam for graduate studies, I was watching a motivation speech of Denzel Washington. It was inspiring for me and convinced me to work harder. However, right now after twenty years, those speeches seem just interesting to me and do not change my personal characteristics.
The other point that should be mentioned here is that young people are more interested in using technology. In detail, with the onset of technology, the lifestyle of people, especially young ones, has been changed dramatically. As a matter of fact, social media make a condition for people to share their ideas. In this regard, young people spend most of their time surfing on the internet or following celebrities through their Instagram accounts. Being fascinated with their lifestyle, young people are more likely to imitate whatever they do or consider them a role model for their lives. Nevertheless, older people are less familiar with using technology and, consequently, are less in the exposure of the opinions of celebrities. For example, while I am not even familiar with creating an Instagram account, my son spends almost one-fourth of his time surfing on this social media. Recently, one famous celebrity posted a video clip through her Instagram account announcing that The Environment is extensively suffering from pollution. Thus, my son realized the importance of saving the planet and has taken the responsibility to separate our household trashes for further recycling ever since. Had my son not followed this famous person on Instagram, he would not care about the Environment now.
To sum up, the opinions of celebrities are more important to youngsters than old people. Not only are young people looking for useful resources to shape their personality, but they also are more under the exposure of celebrities’ ideas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, for example, i think, as a matter of fact, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08061002179 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86966232539 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509803921569 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1431989425 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.391304348 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9565217391 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17391304348 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196675053594 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676690791163 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565229633896 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148531138376 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406601071588 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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