tpo 30
Nowadays, as human's needs become more than ever, they need to meet their requirements by working hard. The question which arises here is whether working three days a week with longer hours would be more beneficial than working five days a week but with shorter working hours. I, personally, contend that working five days a week with shorter hours would be more cheerful and enjoyable for the employees. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first remarkable reason to be mentioned is that since socializing with others is an essential part of human's life, by going to work on most of the week's day, people could meet this tendency. Socializing is proved to have considerable impacts on human's brain ability. In other words, not only would it keep their mind sharp, but also it would energize them and release substances which brings them happiness. Take a personal experience, when I was studying for a university exam, I ended going out, and I stopped socializing with peers and family members, after a month, I faced with severe depression, which lowered my mental ability and I could not pass that exam favorably. Had I continue seeing my friend and relationships, I would have got better score in that exam.
Another equally important point is that you can dedicate the remained time of the day to other activities. For example, one may opt for going to art classes such as painting or may spend time with family members or cheering out with friends. Therefore they can strengthen their bonds, which is necessary. Moreover, they can do regular exercises to keep their body in shape and maintain their health situation. Since people only live once and they should enjoy it the most, it is necessary to allot time to themselves. According to niche, the more you focus on yourself, the more fruitful benefits you gain.
In conclusion, It is highly recommended to work five days a week with shorter hours as it will benefit humans by providing their social needs and also give them the freedom to do their interest in remained hours. It is suggested that the government set some law in this regard to banning long hours works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs become" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'become' or 'to be become'.
Suggestion: become; to be become
Nowadays, as humans needs become more than ever, they need to meet their...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'weeks'' or 'week's'?
Suggestion: weeks'; week's
...s life, by going to work on most of the weeks day, people could meet this tendency. S...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'continued'.
Suggestion: continued
...uld not pass that exam favorably. Had I continue seeing my friend and relationships, I w...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...y members or cheering out with friends. Therefore they can strengthen their bonds, which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84010840108 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56161933952 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550135501355 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4027718443 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.058823529 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7058823529 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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