TPO 30 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, human can use their time in the way that they like. there are people enjoy the routine challenge every day and spend rest of their day, although, I am not such that person. Personally, I am multitask person who do not want to spent his whole life and time in just one career , additionally, I do not like to release unfinished work until next day, I prefer to work for long time to wrap up my career.
First of all, I am multitask person, so, I enjoy to use my rest of the week in the way that I like. The activity like hiking, swimming, camping with my friends and the hobby like these. Actually, I could do an other work for more earning and having better life and easily spend it with my family and friends. As intense I work for company that I have to be there 40 hours a week, therefore, I divide it into three days with about 13 hours work and rest of my week I go to the college for resume my education.
Secondly, I am the kind of person who do not want to revile the task incompletely, therefore, I prefer work more hours a day instead do some task incomplete. I used to work as software developer for a company, they had to reduce the light to force me to leave my office, because, they knew that if I start the project, I do not let my unfinished work to the next day, however, I have to stay night awake. After that I quieted my job because their time did not let me done my work.
For concluding, I cannot stay in job that engage me every day to the work instead 3 sleepless day. As, I want my other days for spend it by myself, and I do not like incomplete tasks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays, human can use their time in th...
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Suggestion: There
...e their time in the way that they like. there are people enjoy the routine challenge ...
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Suggestion: ,
...s whole life and time in just one career , additionally, I do not like to release ...
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Suggestion:
...k for long time to wrap up my career. First of all, I am multitask person, so,...
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Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
... hobby like these. Actually, I could do an other work for more earning and having better...
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Suggestion:
... the college for resume my education. Secondly, I am the kind of person who do...
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Suggestion:
...eir time did not let me done my work. For concluding, I cannot stay in job tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.10576923077 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33512014367 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 418.5 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.4537051457 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.75 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277011841918 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114985644318 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741229405485 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192034323516 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412382244538 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.85 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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