TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
it is very challenging for each government to spend their budget in the most effective way to develop their country. the controversial question which arises here is whether government should expend this funding for university or allocate it for young children. As far as I am concerned, although i strongly believe that important role of the university is undeniable, it is very integral for each country to invest on their adolescent because they are the future of the country and we have to attend to them. I feel this way for two main reasons which will be explored in the following paragraph.
first of all, one should take into account the fact that by providing financial support for young children most of them can join into school. consequently, we can readily boost our inferastructure, and utilize new approch to resive new achivement because when this individuals attend to university they have an enterprising idea that is helpful for country to push it toward success. I recently hear a news that reports within three decades in the most part of the Asia allocate most of their budget for the young children. as a result, most of the young children had a tendency to study hard because they never facing financial problems. by this notion, Asian country improve their education gradually, and nowadays they are a major competitor for another country.
the second remarkable reason is that most of the schools do not have another sources to give more money. in contrast, most of the university can solve funding crisises by earning tution fees, renting most of their land, holding software classes, and etc. my university is a compelling answer. my university has a proffesional soccer team that every year participate in the competitions. most of the company are eager to be an sponsership for our team, and our university find it a good source of revenue. each year they build new classes for faculties and providing more equipment for classes and labs, but my high school had to endured most of the problems. had my high school had a more quality. would have nurtured more powerful students.
in conclusion, it is fundamental for each government to spend more money on education of young children because they can join to schools and solving most of our problems, and because most of the universities have another sources, which is enough for them to amend their equipment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, second, so, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95037220844 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76070398521 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48635235732 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2237136297 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.833333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231529166736 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783931735865 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594471189371 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16552833907 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488989760686 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.