TPO25(independent) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to help their communities.
Contemporary human lives in a sophisticated world where changing is acquiring at a galloping rate. Thus, it is integral for adolescents to dedicate their time meticulously on the activities that are fundamental for them. The controversial question which arises here is whether young people do not allocate ample of time to assist their society. If I were to manage my time, I would definitely devote it for myself rather than consider communities. it is my firm belief that young people do not give enough time for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that teenagers make an effort to relax and relieve their tensions. Therefore, they are eager to pursuing their hobbies with their friends or focus on their lessons instead of helping their communities. Moreover, when people engage with tasks that are related to communities, they lose their time to focus on their hobbies and their courses, so they never feel relax. my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. when I was a sophomore, I was an active member of red crest, and allocated most of my time to manage these activities. As a result, I suffered from stress because I never cared about my hobbies and my university. Had I never allocated my time to help my communities, I would have lived without any anxiety, and release my pressure when I was pursuing my hobbies.
The second remarkable reason is that in this precarious economic time most of the young people are struggling with their own business because they need to have a good source revenue. when they occupy themselves to assist their communities, they can’t follow their profession, and it makes the life demanding for young people. my own experience is a compelling answer. following my graduation, I drew up plans to start a small software development firm. that was detailed, and I was confident that it will provides for me a lucrative business in the future, yet I decided to helping my communities because they suffered from economic problems. Not only, I couldn't do beneficial helps for them to surmount their problems, but also I lost my own business, and experienced a hard situation.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people never allocate their time for helping their communities because they never can relax and release their tension and because they have to focus on their own business to have a high paying job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95260663507 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80849177747 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509478672986 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3405981315 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25423116444 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867259626425 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733756395005 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175842244278 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361517634084 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.