TPO 36-Independent- For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
In this modern world, education plays an increasingly important role in the development of society. When it comes to allocating money to different parts of the education system, the government always confronts the dilemma of whether to spend more money on the education of very young children or spending more money on universities. While some people are inclined towards the idea that allocating more money to young children’s education is more important than universities, others believe government should spend more money on universities. As far as I am concerned, I believe spending money on universities is more important than children's education. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first reason coming to my mind is that universities need more sophisticated and progressive facilities and equipment that most of them are extremely expensive, therefore, they need a huge amount of money in comparison to children’s education system. At university different fields of studies tutored with various core curriculums that include theoretical and practical courses, thus they need equipped labs, developed laboratories, research projects budget, professors, and staff salaries. All of this stuff is very costly. For instance, while an elementary school can purchase their needed equipment with 100000 dollars, the university needs more than five hundred dollars to provide its school with reasonable equipment and other costs.
Another noteworthy reason is that by investing more money in university education, the government can help universities to increase their revenue significantly. Since universities that supported by the government have numerous facilities and advantages from the high-quality dormitories, class apparatus to well-known and prestigious professors, they have an added advantages over their competitors to attract more students. As a result, the tuition fees and other expenses that are paid by students can improve the income of universities. For instance, as the United States has allocated a considerable amount of funds for higher education, it is famous for the cutting-edge education system, consequently, most foreign students choose the United States as their first choice to continue their studies.
To summarize from what has been discussed above, the government should allocate a great amount of money to universities since they need more developed equipment that is very pricy. Moreover, this approach helps universities to boost their income by attracting more students not only throughout their country but also from all over the world.
Comments
I enjoy playing video games…
I enjoy playing video games and listening to music. Slope 3 is a game that allows me to meet new people from all around the world. This game will assist you in making friends in all four directions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66582914573 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0844295197 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520100502513 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.2636187972 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.333333333 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5333333333 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37354610316 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12890413272 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115084590759 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217151928038 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120657494253 0.0645574589148 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 58.1214874552 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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