TPO 40 Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern age, teaching styles varies from one parent to another. Some individuals believe that reward system will help to increase the grades of their children, while others disagree. In my humble opinion, I agree that offering reward for children help them to be motivated and excel on their studies. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, nowadays there are many ways to keep children stay motivated in their studies. One of this is giving rewards and point system for their good performance at school. This method is widely used by parents all over the world because of its effectiveness. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, my niece Sam is always a straight a student, her mother helps her to be motivated at school by giving reward system. It is a way for my niece to focus her mind on studying her subjects well because she knows her efforts will be recognized and rewarded. Her rewards are just simple things such as allowing her to use her cellphone every Sunday when she does her assignment all by herself and receiving good grades will allow her to watch movie with friends. This illustrates that rewards system keeps students be motivated and they can maintain to keep their score high.
Secondly, when rewards system are implemented by their parents to their child. Studies shows that students excel better compared to students who are not rewarded by their parents. For instance, my mother always rewarded me for good behavior and having high grades at school. In my sophomore years, I have difficulty understanding my lessons and wanted to give up studying for my algebra subject, but my mother talked to me and told me that I should study harder because if I get high grades after my exam she will treat me to my favorite restaurant at my hometown. After hearing this from my mother, I immediately got my attention to the subject and wanted to push my capabilities more to analyze and understand my algebra subject better. Moreover, my hard work pays off, I received B+ on my exam and my mother was very pleased with my grades. I always wanted to excel more to my studies because I know my parents will be proud and I love receiving gifts and rewards for my hard work.
To summarize, I believe that it is beneficial that parents gives reward to their child for performing well at school. This is because they will be motivated to study even better and excel more at their studies.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, i feel, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69794050343 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50699214376 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482837528604 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2668508883 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.65 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164996819445 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752778357438 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500263292396 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131021828879 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350923356636 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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