TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world, parents usually are busy with various backbreaking tasks at work and house, therefore, they have not enough time to spend with their children. In such circumstances, children have a wide variety of options to utilize their time efficiently, such as playing games and sports or doing schoolwork. A controversial question, which is often raised in this regard, is which one of the mentioned options is the best choice for the best use of their time. Different people hold different perspectives according to their previous experiences. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that the advantages of playing sports for children are immense and indisputable. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first noteworthy reason coming to my mind is that participation in sports and games improves children's health and well-being. Nowadays, there has been a significant increase in chronic diseases like diabetes, obesity, and cardiovascular diseases among young children. Scientists have proven that the primary reason for this increase is the lack of physical activity due to the sedentary lifestyle. Thus, playing their favorite sport will make them active and prevent the risk of being sick with chronic diseases. For instance, a national program in Finland has asked families to enroll their children in free sports games and other physical programs, the result of this plan has shown the rate of obesity and other illnesses has decreased significantly among children.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that physical activities can improve children's intellectual ability. There is a significant correlation between doing physical activities and improving mind performances, Researchers found doing physical activities boost the blood flow to the brain and as a result, the power of the mind increases significantly. Consequently, this outcome will have a positive influence on children’s academic performances, helps children to grasp their class material rapidly and for a longer period of time. For example, during my elementary school, the top students of the class were among students who spent their leisure time in the gym.
On the other hand, some may believe doing schoolwork with peers is best for children since they can practice their lessons together. However, I postulate allocating free time to school assignments will make children bored and exhausted. They need something other than schoolwork to cheer them up as well as has hidden advantages that influence their academic performances.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, I firmly believe playing sports is the best choice for students to use their time. This option not only prevents many serious diseases but also improves their mind and consequently their academic performances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 521, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...class material rapidly and for a longer period of time. For example, during my elementary scho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41463414634 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96317219833 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518847006652 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5580485925 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.1 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.55 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350890349484 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101881091861 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816118280069 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204823199092 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824660729212 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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