Tpo 44Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

It is generally agreed that education is vital for children, and parents should do their best to support them /to/ study well at school. In this regard, personally, I believe that parents’ support to their children in education matters is much more important than playing sports with them. I hold this opinion since parents are the most influential teachers; and they are ready to do everything for their kids.
To begin with, parents are the best teachers and the ones whose role in educating youngsters cannot be underestimated. Although our schools are hiring well-educated and experienced tutors to teach our children, parents know their kids’ individual characteristics better. They know which are the strong sides and weaknesses of the latter, and, therefore, are more able to explain things to their children. For example, my son studies at school and often he needs my help to understand the tasks he is assigned to do at home. Of course, I do my best to try to explain him the learning material and to check how he performed his assignments. The fact that I know that my son better understands various graphics, tables leads me to use them in order to explain something to him. I even explain him his history material in graphics. As a result, he does well at school and always gets good grades. So, parents are in a better position in terms of using individual features of their children while teaching them.
Additionally, parents love their children probably most of everything in the world and this makes them devoted to anything they do for their children. They are ready to sacrifice their time and energy to fully explain something to their children. Teachers at school, on the other hand, have a high level of proficiency, but they deal with a lot of children and cannot pay them enough attention. For instance, some time ago my son was contemplating that he is not able to solve math tasks. Initially, I was thinking that he does not have enough abilities in this sphere of science. Meanwhile, latter I realized that the problem is not in my son; the math teacher was not able to pay sufficient attention to the all kids in the class since it was a quite large one. So, after several sessions of my work with my son, he increased his grades in math, as well. Thus, parents are always ready and able to pay due attention to their children’s education problems.
To sum up briefly, we all want our kids to become well-rounded individuals. We should realize that we are the most responsible people in that regard because we better know our children’s individual traits, and because we love and care of them.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., and because we love and care of them.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, of course, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80701754386 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78852185018 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486842105263 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.406586177 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6363636364 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7272727273 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21263170231 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646749593012 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477765561048 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122301415721 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629229367522 0.0645574589148 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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