TPO 45
In this competitive world, everone wants to be successful so you have to be aware of conditions you face them. some people believes that young people can decide better than young people in the past. Personally, I believe this claim. there are some reasons which built my opinion in this way, and I'm describing them in this essay.
First of all, there are several enrichments in technology in these days, therefore young people have more facilities to decide better than before. To make it clear, nowedays, we can use internet to seek about whatever we want to know about, so we would have a clear wide information to decide based on them. As refering it to our real life, I wanted to apply to three types of universities in the united state which are included Virginia university, Wisconsin university and university of California , but I was indecision in selecting the best university between them. I searched educational information about all of them, and I eventually found out that university of Virginia is the best choice for me according to the close link between their approches in education and my interests.
Moreover, people study books more than before, so they have more knowledge than young people in the past. it was more common to rely on the experiences to make a choice in the past, but nowedays, young men utilize both of them at the same time. In this case, they might have no experience about the considered situation, so then they use old men's experiences. Back to my example, I knew someone who's tought at the united state's university. she told me everything she knew about universities I mentioned them before. these information helped me to have a brilient choice.
In conclusion, I think that making a right decision is much more convinient for young people in this time than people in tha past. having more facilities and equipments and vast knowledge combined experiences and studying books are the reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88484848485 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74044939514 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530303030303 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7313589911 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.75 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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