TPO 47
The era which we are living in, has been called era of knowledge by several thought leaders. This statement clearly shows the importance of knowledge and also the value of getting informed of whats happening around the world. Although we all know that most of this information would never be useful for us, but the same time I think it is necessary to get it. Following I will explore my reasons for this statement.
First, these events may have affect our lives in the long run. While all this news my seems completely disconnected from our every day ongoings, but they can have an impact on our life later on. My own experience is a good example for this. I remember last year I heard some news about the right of our country having access to nuclear energy. At that time this news seemed completely unrelated to me, I really was not interested to knowing all details. However, after 6 months I heard that there is committy of different powerful countries that are treathening our government to accept their conditions of stopping nuclear related activites or facing the consequnces. Again to sounded unrelated. But, just one month ago, these countries claimed that they are going to instill some sanctions on our country. This sanctions greaty impacted the economy and in one week the value of national currency dropped to half. This example clearly displayed that any event can have a longterm effact on our lives.
Secondly, these events make us more informed and hence more experience people. Although events currently happening around the world may directly affact us, but as you know, history repeats it self. By knowing what is happening around, you can gain experience, that would help you make better decisions in your daily life. My own experience demonstrates this fact. When I was 15 I remember that every day in news there was a talk about the riase of house purchasing prices. At that time I was a teenage, a things like housing prices was not of importance for me. However, when last year I decided to finally get my own apartment, I remebered all the details that I used to here from TV, and they helped me to analysis the current suituation on house trade better, and all this resulted in my very sucessful purchase. So, by the experince that I gained from events around me, I was able to make a better decision.
In sammary, although most of the events that we here may not affect our everyday life, but it is better to be informed about them, because they may impact your future or, on the other hand, you may need this information as an experience for your life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, i think, you know, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7010989011 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49916880277 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520879120879 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7545160224 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7826086957 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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