TPO 47- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In fact, being aware of the world's events has turned into a controversial issue which has obliged schools’ principals to plan a course for students to train more knowledgeable people who follow the global news. although a vast majority of people believes that knowing about the phenomena isn't counted as a necessary work that should be done routinely, others would rather read the latest news, which is leaked out, about all four corners of the world. As far as I'm concerned. I agree with the second idea which highly recommends that people should announce all incidents, although our lives aren't influenced by them. The reasons to reinforce my perspectives are illustrated hereunder.
The first and foremost reason of the aforementioned nation is that being aware of the occurrences which have happened in other countries contributes us to prevent the deleterious events; whereas, oblivious people usually can't predict some obvious issues before it is going to occur. Albeit, some of these happenings presumably don't change our lives directly, they can cause people to be more ready for when they encounter such situations. For instance, Amazon, one of the biggest forest on the earth, were burnt because of a special law that had been enacted in the United State. The reports of the flames help people of other countries, especially policymakers, to avoid such legislation. As a result, reading other societies' news definitely teaches members of society to anticipated some probable perils.
Another conspicuous reason of the above-stated claim, which should be mentioned here, is that knowing about the worlds' phenomena which contain a wide range of subjects including economic topics, political issues, educational themes, etc. converts us to an intelligent person. When people study more about all aspects especially about the world's events, their knowledge will considerably increase; therefore, a knower can comment about the facets of today's problems in most groups. Not only does it lead people to be known as an astute person but also people's ability to interaction will be improved as well. Hence, the more awareness about current events, the better position which can be gained in society.
All in all, one cannot neglect the fact that searching about the recent events of the globe will contribute people to make a better decision, find appropriate situation among the people who communicate with him or her, and harness feasible hazard. in conclusion, I extremely support the new determination of the school's principals; in addition, I suggest people whether older or young to be aware more and more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28878281623 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78578054556 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615751789976 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4410292349 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.352941176 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6470588235 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110778105706 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034018122591 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280156979476 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711793002578 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209423132453 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.