TPO 48- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in todays' world, nobody can deny the importance of creating plan for making a disciplined life with joy. While some people believe that is a crucial skill for everybody which can plan, the others hold the view that in nowadays modern life we cannot plan for every aspect of life and this abiity is not vital. Personally, I am of the former gruop's viewpoint. The reasons substantiating my standpoint will be explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, in this modern life which every aspects of life is transforming with a high rate, it is necessary for every person to have the ability to creat a personal plan for managing every parts of their lives. To elaborate, nowadays every person needs to work at least 8 hours a day for regulating their incomes, besides, they spend many hours in the traffic jam; thus, if they do not have the ability to manage their time, they cannot do well in the other aspects of life such as family life.
In addition, the happiness in life is unaccessable without any entertainments which are required the ability to plan. To elucidate, it is crystal clear that growing statistics of depression in modern life is due to lack of joy among the people, which everybody should work through days and nights; thus, if an individual has the ability to plan can make the balanve between different parts of their life and enjoy his life. My own experience is a compelling example of this reason. When I was a bachelors' degree student in university, I did not plan for my tasks during the day and an enormous part of my day was being waste in communing for the dormitory to the dormitory. However, when I was a masters' student, I learned from one of my colleagues to make a plan for myself. Thereafter, I devided my daytime to different part and put a side some times for excersing and pastime. Have I not planed my time, I would not be happy in my life.
As shown above, considering all the points and the reasons mentioned, one could conclude that it is a key ability which every body can plan their own lives. It is because that, for managing different parts of life and feeling fulfilled in the life this ability is essential.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...can plan, the others hold the view that in nowadays modern life we cannot plan for every as...
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Line 9, column 494, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a bachelor' or simply 'bachelors'?
Suggestion: a bachelor; bachelors
...ling example of this reason. When I was a bachelors degree student in university, I did not...
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Line 9, column 697, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'masters'' or 'master's'?
Suggestion: masters'; master's
...to the dormitory. However, when I was a masters student, I learned from one of my colle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, thus, well, while, at least, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62086513995 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5891057257 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491094147583 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.8599303206 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.066666667 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22885238302 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843499223474 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449560085585 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155293445998 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182526728669 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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