TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends
By and large, there is no doubt that nowadays, friendship plays a pivotal role in people's happiness in their lives. No one can deny the influence of making friendship on our private lives. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is how many friends we have should in our life. some people may hold this view that maintaining a friendship with a small number of people over a long period is more important for happiness. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that the ability to make many new friends is more effective for happiness. As for this writer opinion, I subscribe to this idea that friendship maintaining ability is more important for happiness.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance is that in order to make a good and persistent friendship causing happiness and successfulness, people should spend more time to know each other. in this regard, they cannot have too many friends and it is crystal clear that people cannot know their friends in a short period of time. Recognition before making a deep friendship is require in order to have a stable and full of happiness friendship. people must recognize their friend character and mortality in order to reduce their confliction and dissatisfaction. As a case in point, when I was a student, I made a friendship with one of my classmate named Arash. At the beginning we did not have enough cognition form each other, and both of us tried to test each other in different situation. I helped him in university courses, and he helped me to conquer my work problems. Finally, after about two years I found that he can be a real friend for me. accordingly, we had more happiness after this cognition.
Furthermore, trustability is one of the most important factors in any relationship to have happiness. A survey conducted by experts from oxford university shows that 95% of people are happy with their trustable friends. it is crystal clear that no one can trust on the new friend. people need more time in order to trust their friends. TO illustrate that this idea let's consider the following example. my friend had a new friend named Amir, and he had invited his friend to a party at his home without any cognition. after the party it turned out that my friend's wristwatch has been robbed. his new friend had robbed the watch. this example clearly illustrates my point.
The main conclusion to be drawn from this writing is that people need a long period to know their friend in order to have happiness. accordingly, the number of friends could not be too many. people cannot evaluate a large number of people for making friendship. Moreover, they need to test their new friends in order to trust them. all in all, it is anticipated that people be careful about their friend selection and their behaviors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, as for, in conclusion, no doubt, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85040983607 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74299378084 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452868852459 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2514340198 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6206896552 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8275862069 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48275862069 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309386604579 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850535644383 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724146343052 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202621323318 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778286415343 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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