TPO-5 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

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TPO-5 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

There is no doubt that nowadays human-being' life in many aspects are different from that of the past generations. Devoting time on personal enjoyment during a day is of a paramount important on people' life. This brings up a controversial question surrounding the time that individuals spend: Is it a credible idea that humankind devote too much time on personal pleasure? In my perspective, I strongly assert that people' time is allocated to things that they should do. The reasons behind this viewpoint are discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first reason that immediately comes to mind is that people involve in the jobs. In fact, individuals go to their professions from the early on the morning and they work up to 8 hours a day until the evening. In their work, they have to finish their day-to-day duties such as typing at the computer or arranging their bosses’ appointment and many other regular tasks that people most time do not enjoy performing them. The workers in the companies also should terminate their work every day by cleaning the workspace or operating devices in order to producing products. All of these activities are mandatory and people should execute in their job for the sake of gaining money. Therefore, workers and employees dedicate much time on doing compulsory things rather than enjoyable tasks.
The second and important reason that support my standpoint is that individuals and students study to obtain a degree from a college. Indeed, young people dedicate their time on attending on the university classes and listening to boring and tiring lectures. The students prepare difficult and arduous research papers that their professors assign them. Moreover, the students study hard at the end of each semester to get higher scores in their final university exams. People and juveniles carry out the aforementioned works and tasks because they want to acquire a degree such as bachelor or master degree from a college, while such activities causes to get tired rather than to feel delightful. Hence, students as well as young people devote much of their energy as well as time for studying not doing enjoyable activities.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that humankind’ modern life allot their whole time for working at the office or firms and for studying in the university. If people have sufficient time for recreational activities, they will be able to spend time with their family members, whereas they do not have. What is your opinion about it?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'getting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: getting
...a college, while such activities causes to get tired rather than to feel delightful. H...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11244019139 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79924855092 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538277511962 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2208746045 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.85 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282512346756 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876745525676 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10566519857 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18605610551 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504770262876 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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