TPO 51
Films and television is a great source of entertainment nowadays. In our practical life we have suffered from stress, frustration, anxiety etc, films and television provides us a much enjoyment that refreshes our minds, ease our way to go forward, to do our duty properly. In that sense a group of people believe that films and television has positive impact on everyone life but I on the contrary, believe that television and films has negative effects that sometime over weigh the positive impact on young people.
First and foremost, young adult think their lives wrongly by expecting unrealistic things that are happening in the films or television. The scriptwriter and producer design the film in accordance with people’s will to make the movie super hit, where reality is not the fact. But unfortunately the real life is not their desired movie plot, many things eventuate in real life that can’t be controlled by people. For instance, a young man had tried to jump from one skyscraper to another like their favorite movie star that was so risky and finally the man seriously injured, the same things have showed in a film in which the star did this with special equipment and assistance.
Secondly, young adults are stick to movies and television so unwanted that spoil their valuable life time and ultimately they would suffer in long run in life. The movies and television shows are certainly appealing and make people curious about the next episode, so young people unconsciously waste their time on tv and films, where their first duty is to study hardly, take parts in sports that is needed for healthy life. Without doing this they like to hang out with friends to movie theater and sit idly, eat popcorn for two to three hours.
In conclusion, although films and television programmes help to educate people, provide information that is necessary in life, spread our culture in the world but it can’t be denied that it’s negative effect changes young adult’s act wrongly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: A_MUCH_NN1[1]
Message: Maybe you should omit the article "a", leaving only 'much'.
Suggestion: much
...y etc, films and television provides us a much enjoyment that refreshes our minds, eas...
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Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...n so unwanted that spoil their valuable life time and ultimately they would suffer in lon...
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Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'study'.
Suggestion: hardly study
...and films, where their first duty is to study hardly, take parts in sports that is needed fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03880597015 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64236270061 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567164179104 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3956806014 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.454545455 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4545454545 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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