TPO 51 independent agree or not: movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
The advent of cameras has led to the introduction of life-changing, state-of-the-art technologies like televisions and movies. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether these innovations' positive effects outweigh their negative ones on young generation or not. From my point of view, I am highly inclined to the belief that they are mainly disadvantageous for youngsters in spite of the fact that the opposite notion has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. In the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that teenagers are exposed to violent scenes by watching action and science-fiction movies and terrorism-related news from TVs which are abundant due to nowadays phenomena. This issue will have a negative influence on their behaviors when they grow up. As an illustration, researches of RMIT university, which is a well-known knowledge institute in Australia, have conducted a survey of Melbourne's high school students among whom they disseminated a questionnaire. They realized that there is a direct exponential relation between their anxiety and depression level and the amount of time they spend watching horror and thrilling movies which mostly contain violent scenes. They warned the government if they do not act against this wasteful notion nationally, the depression of their country will have increased drastically by the end of 2050. As a result, there media executives have set some restrictions which parents must follow in order not to let their offspring watch harmful contents.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that governments tend to show some beliefs nationally and even globally as the main method of life in order to rule people easier and guide them wherever they want. Most of these shows are not beneficial for individuals. To put in into a more vivid picture, consider the great problem of comunerism in the United States. Due to their liberal governing approaches, their politicians have made their citizent consume and spend money as much as they can insomuch as their secular society is alive because of this notion. Therefore, their medias, including Hollywood movies and seat-shows like the "Ellen show", encourage naive teenagers to buy things more and feed them this misbelief that having more in the goal of their future lives. Providing that young Americans stop whatching and accepting whatecver they see on televisions, they will not grow bat habits of buying excessively things that they do not actually need.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations and facts into account, I believe that medias are more harmful for young people than being useful although there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinions, televisions and movies not only contain violent scenes which hurt teenagers' feeling and cause anxiety and depression but also mislead people by introducing and advertising fauls behaviors like consumerism which is tearing The USA apart.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.412 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02480677069 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.986126072 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.421052632 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3157894737 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140031464046 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400726387644 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384235434601 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886604478526 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235597992226 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 86.8835125448 180% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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