TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that everyone should follow the rules which are implemented by governments and societies. These rules are essential for having a satisfying community. Some people are of the opinion that the rules which are implemented for young people are too strict, whereas others believe that it is essential that they follow the rules precisely. Nevertheless, I concur with the former group's opinion. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on the reasons substantiating my point of view.
To begin with, I assert that young people can become better gradually. Getting old enough, young people can differentiate inappropriate behaviors from good ones. They improve their personalities when they start getting older. Therefore, society should take easy on them. Young people need to make mistakes in order to understand the right path. They should have the chance to experience all those things by themselves. Consequently, such strict rules can cause them not to experience everything by themselves.
Another equally important reason which I think deserves some words is that such strict rules can lower their self-esteem. They need to have their own freedom. We could not expect them to do every single task correctly. Accordingly, I believe that in order to elevate their self-confidence, we should not take hard on them. My personal experience is a compelling example of this concept. When I was 18 years old, I just had started to drive, but I could not drive perfectly, so I tried hard to make it better. Once, I was driving to the university, and all my friends were there in the car. Suddenly, a police officer stopped me. He contempt me in front of my friends because of our laughings in the car. His tone was very offensive. Accordingly, I lost my self-confidence, and it took a long time for me to forget what had happened.
Finally, I concur that it is the parent's job to tell their children about their behaviors. The society should let parents raise their children however they want. All these strict rules should be for the people who are in their middle age and have already taught these behaviors from their parents.
Considering all the reasons mentioned above, one could conclude that all the rules that governments implement for young people, and the societies expect them to follow are extremely strict. They can take easier on them since young people may lose their self-confidence easily, and also they have the right to experience everything by themselves and decide what to do and how to behave.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, whereas, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97902097902 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82361269867 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505827505828 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6929657394 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2857142857 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3214285714 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46428571429 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177496060219 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458454702597 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552160501818 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113509677779 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604650368529 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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