TPO 54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
With the continuous development of society, arts and athletics have become vital to daily life. There are questions as to whether the government should spend more on arts than on sports. I think athletics deserves more government funding than the arts.
To begin with, distributing more funds to sports such as state-sponsored Olympic teams or games benefits the economic development and international reputation of a country. More nations now wish to hold the Olympic Games. To do so, their governments must invest in building stadiums, transportations, among others, to promote their capacity to hold such an event. Besides, with such infrastructures built, tourists would be enticed to come and watch sports competitions or even just take a trip in Olympic cities. The host country earns from sales of tickets and other novelty items and other travel spendings. Thus, the economy would improve. Besides, an unparalleled and well-prepared sports event would leave a good impression to everyone around the world watching the event, thus increasing the popularity and influence of the host nation. Therefore, spending more money in support of athletics is beneficial to the economy and a nation’s international influence.
What is more, allocating more funds to sports would increase public health. If a government spends significantly to build new stadiums and facilities that are convenient for the public to use, more people, young and old alike, would be encouraged to exercise, thus allowing them to stay fit. Besides, since a healthy body leads to a healthy mind, then the disposition of the people would also be more positive, allowing them to accomplish more and contribute more to social progress. Hence, governments should spend more on sports for their constituents’ better health.
In sum, governments must spend more money on athletics because it could drive economic growth while enhancing public health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ital to daily life. There are questions as to whether the government should spend more on art...
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Line 2, column 688, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ides, an unparalleled and well-prepared sports event would leave a good impression to ...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lead'?
Suggestion: lead
...stay fit. Besides, since a healthy body leads to a healthy mind, then the disposition...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, i think, such as, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 43.0788530466 19% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39867109635 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98880742685 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581395348837 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3186177615 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5625 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295667606545 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102115771804 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761432888031 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183246635905 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590019456572 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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