Regarding living in a modern area that provides people to have a hectic daily lifestyle, the government should provide a better environment to release the stress s and high tension of the peoples. In other words, by providing a healthy environment the politician can help humans to make a happier life. Despite the fact that the effects of inventing artistic environment cannot be neglected to make people happier, it is my firm conviction that investing on athletic points are more prominent to creat people more healthy. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that proliferation of exercise and encouraging people through doing different sport will make them a well-time to change their lifestyles and care more about their health. In fact, due to the daily hectic lifestyle that people are involving with, there is no enough time to have an exercise. However, If the government spend money to invent new opportunity and impulsive people to engage more with sport, they will become more healthy.
Take my personal experience as a compelling example. I was working in a big company for significants amounts of hours that makes me lots of physical problems. by pathing, through those hectic days, our company had decided to bring about a gym for employees which was significantly effect on our efficiency directly. This example clearly illustrates that, If the administration of our company hadn't been brought the sports environment for the employee, the efficiency of workers would have been reduced over the passing time.
Another important reason that would distinguish the effectiveness of spending money on athletics emerge on children’s future. As the children need to grow in an exciting society which helps them to become calmer and mitigate the paucity of tension on their daily days, it will be a supposed government to fund strength the workout worlds by taking and spending more money on them. Although, arts have special benefits on children's future life, athletic known as indispensable for every kind of kid. The resect study about the effectiveness of exercise on children rather than art represents that students who spend most of their time with sport make their future secure by making their sprite calm and activate their mind by evolving with a daily workout.
In conclusion, I totally agree that the government better to spend more money on exercise rather than art. It not only does release people's stress, but also helps children to make their future lifestyle more secure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11455847255 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74386001442 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546539379475 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1884066678 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.058823529 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6470588235 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129912084236 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469913548588 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546560953855 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0814229637913 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486440783785 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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