TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Nowadays the issue of allocating the resources of a nation would be a critical problem for the government cause the resources are limited but the issues need a lot of attention. While some people believe that the governments should expense more money on the arts than in support of athletics. In my opinion, I would disagree with it. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, the state-sponsored Olympic teams would be a beneficial investment because they would embellish the reputation of the nation and bring more attention from the other foreigners. As a result, it would lead to other advantages. It is no doubt that the Olympic event is one of the most famous and huge events in the world, which has many people come from around the world to watch the biggest sport in the world every 4 years. So this is a great place to advertise and let other people know about our country by investing in Olympic teams. They would impress the people not only by their performance in the game but also their garments and the clip about the beautiful nature of that nation. For example, from my experience, before the Winter Olympics in 2016, I have not known anything about Croatia, but their performance and especially their outfits have impressed me about a nation having many colorful and many breathtaking views.
Secondly, even many people like sports but only several kinds of sports getting attention from the public. There are many athletics from the other sports even though they have brings a lot of valuable metals for the country, no one knows or even remembers them. In my country, for instance, which is an Asian country, the most favorite sport is soccer, and they would fund a lot of money for their favorite athletics even, to be honest, the soccer team does not achieve any big prize in the level of the world. However, the volleyball team of my country got first place in Olympics 2 times, there is only a small number of people concerning or knowing about this event. And these athletics, even they acquired many admirable achievements, still need to work part-time besides their training because there are not enough resources from the government to help them have a better life or facility for training.
In conclusion, although both arts and sports need support from the government to develop, I believe that athletics need more attention and funding from the government more because they are delegates for a country when going into global gaming. They would bring more good impression for their country and from that lead more benefits. Moreover, there are still many athletics that does not have enough support for either their life and training, even they have many achievements.

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Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...but the issues need a lot of attention. While some people believe that the government...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...lace in Olympics 2 times, there is only a small number of people concerning or knowing about this...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85350318471 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51579187486 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469214437367 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9856821838 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129827147415 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510067032735 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651371312138 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101801330156 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573118151948 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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