People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
<p class="MsoNormal" style="text-align:justify"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;
line-height:107%;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif">The term "behavior"
is quietly easy to describe. In general, "behavior" means how a
person acts or reacts according to the external or internal forces. Thus, there
is a statement that these external forces having solely constituted our
behavior. Although it is no doubts that these forces play a vital role in
making up our conduct, I believe that it is highly unjustified to say that.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="text-align:justify"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;
line-height:107%;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif">On the one hand, human beings
are the most intelligent species, have the liberty of choice and we can think,
decide and execute things. Our decision and actions are made by our self.
However, outside factors such as society, law, peer, family, etc, contribute to
human behavior. History shows many flaw people were the product of these
influences. For example, those people who live in the 1990s would still
remember Linsey Lohan, a kid actress for Disney Production, she was considered
as a young talented actress and nominated for best actress in a drama, however
when she got fame and fortune, she had been degraded by these things, her
career gradually went down and she committed to drug addiction. Nevertheless,
there are some external factors such as laws, rules, and regulations in society
were adopted because of practical purposes, but it depends on those who whether
to abide by rules or not. For instance, in Singapore, there may be a punishment
for throwing garbage on the road or smoke in the public places, nonetheless,
thanks for these rules this nation has obtained many advantages such as it is
one of the most hygiene countries all around the world and attracting more and
more visitors. <o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="text-align:justify"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;
line-height:107%;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif">On the other hand, in the end,
it is completely dependent on us to make the decisions as we are our
decision-makers. In this case, the sense of individual will come into crucial
play. Although the rules, laws and outer forces continuously remind us against
doing bad or illegal, there are people who break laws, which is evident by the
crime rate, thus, what are the effects of external force on such people? They
have decided not to let the external forces determine their behavior. A thief
will steal in spite of the laws in society. Many argue that their actions
resulted from poverty, circumstances, etc, but it is eventually the thief who
makes the decision. As a result, <span style="color: black; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">you </span><span class="lh"><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;">can only</span><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;"> </span><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;">be</span><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;"> </span><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;">responsible</span><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;"> </span><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;">for</span></span><span style="text-align: start;"> your own
attitudes and </span><span class="lh"><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 236, 141) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;">behaviors</span><span style="box-sizing: border-box; box-shadow: rgb(255, 216, 13) 0px 3px 0px 0px; text-align: start;">.</span></span></span><o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="text-align:justify"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;
line-height:107%;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif">In conclusion, the above
statement is not entirely proper. Although we have to face many external forces
and I suppose that we are affected by them, human beings take the responsibility
of whether letting or not these effects. So, I firmly believe that our action
springs from our free will accord with common sense and everyday experience.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, in general, no doubt, such as, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4424.0 2235.4752809 198% => OK
No of words: 596.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 7.42281879195 5.05705443957 147% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94096258147 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 8.44894208255 2.79657885939 302% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493288590604 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1111.5 704.065955056 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.59117977528 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 379.403869773 60.3974514979 628% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 232.842105263 118.986275619 196% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3684210526 23.4991977007 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2105263158 5.21951772744 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 43.0 4.97078651685 865% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0433393541899 0.243740707755 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313285750146 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358189433096 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0209487501138 0.150359130593 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028967957114 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.2 14.1392134831 207% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.63 48.8420337079 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.1743820225 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 26.35 12.1639044944 217% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 100.480337079 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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