TPO 59
The reading and listening materials have a debate on how to save the rhinoceros. The writer proposes three ways, nevertheless, the speaker argues that all of those ways have significant weaknesses.
The writer claims that wildlife experts can remove Rhino horns, however the speaker views this issue from an opposite angle. According to her, this idea is not practical or good enough, since it will decrease Rhinos' survival rates, she advances the theory by saying that, although we have money and time to settle them, they still might not survive after the surgery. On the other hand, this may help them avoid being killed by poachers, however, they use the horn to dig for water, find food, and protect youngsters, so if they do not have the horn, it is a disadvantage living in wild.
The author states that they can educate consumers, but the speaker opposes the idea and takes the view that it is difficult to educate people with strong and old beliefs. She indicates the thought that rhino horn can heal from very ancient and old cultures which may last for a thousand years. So new scientific pieces of evidence are unlikely to change people's minds.
The reading argues that the government should legalize the sale of rhino horns. By contrast, in accordance with the speaker, the passage's claim does not hold water because this may have unpredictable results. She contends that people now do not buy it because it is illegal if the government sales were legal, people think it is acceptable to buy it, as a result, the demand will highly increase, leading to larger markets. So the price will become expensive again, which makes the poachers kill more rhinos in order to gain numerous profits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hose ways have significant weaknesses. The writer claims that wildlife experts can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87628865979 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40423629145 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625429553265 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1354392988 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.25 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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