TPO 60: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern world, the importance of moving to the new place has come under fire, following people’s growing concern on their lives. While an array of people advocate that they are required to move to a new place in their entire lives, others hold the opposite perspective. I profoundly have conflict with this consensus that claims individuals ought to stay in one place in their whole lives. There are several reasons, two of which will be explained in the ensuing essay.
The first reason I should mention is that it is of paramount importance that ones move to a new place so as to improve their leaving situation. To be more specific, in some cities and towns, especially the metropolitan ones, the government dedicate special budget to revamp their facilities. Gone are the days when people were able to deal with the absence some plenty of infrastructures such as water supply, electricity supply, and road networks. So critically important is that having easy access to all amenities which spurs people to change their cities if they lack of access their needs. Moreover, education system and medication are the lifeblood of each city. For instance, those family who have children should live in a city which they can get involve their offspring in a school is associated with quality services and excellent facilities. As a result, if people did not live in a suitable situation, they would change their town or city.
Another noteworthy and exquisite reason that I could add is that people should live in a place providing a situation for them to keep in touch with other people. Due to the paramount importance of fulfilling the innate desire of socializing, people are required to live in a place they are able to communicate with others. Meeting up with people who share common interest would get them out of the house and boost the sense of belonging. Needless to say, living in an area that children are also able to keep in touch with their peers improve their intellectual development within a time frame. Children excelling in communication with others are the ones who had this golden opportunity in their childhood to live in a pleasant area. Having been in touch with other people, individuals would not be faced with anxiety and depression compared to those people living in an area they are not able to talk to other people.
By and large, I disagree with this argument on the grounds that people entail having access to the excellent facilities and other essential needs. In addition, they should live in a place to interact with others, so they feel better in their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...mportance that ones move to a new place so as to improve their leaving situation. To be ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 298, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...budget to revamp their facilities. Gone are the days when people were able to deal ...
^^^
Line 4, column 684, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this family' or 'those families'?
Suggestion: this family; those families
...e lifeblood of each city. For instance, those family who have children should live in a city...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87640449438 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61957707802 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485393258427 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3914443421 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.210526316 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4210526316 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152488005765 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558079249356 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357371856336 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103988141764 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00762551473242 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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