TPO 62: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern world, to keep abreast of 21st century, it is of paramount importance for students to dabble in a collection of skills, as well as take some rest after the high school. While an array of people and academics advocate that pupils should never have a gap after their high school, other hold the opposite perspective. I profoundly subscribe to this consensus that claims students ought to go on a trip or ought to find an occupation for at least several years, before go into university. There are several reasons, two of which will be explained in the ensuing essay.
The first reason I should mention is that if learners are taken on by companies, they are going to acquire skills and knowledge. There is a growing concern about students disengaging from their study for years that they are not likely to receive higher education in the years ahead. Because of the fact that many companies and enterprise would rather recruit students who are able to do an array of jobs, it is of paramount importance that learners find a job immediately after their high school in exchange for pursuing tertiary education. Moreover, students excelling in collection of skills, ranging from they had taken in at high school to they had gained in their job are set to be hired in higher position. As a result, not only does finding their true vocation make them versatile, but it also contributes to match the needs of fast-changing and competitive society.
Another noteworthy and exquisite reason that I could add is that travelling at the time being is the lifeblood of expanding knowledge and feeling all tensions unwind. Finishing high school, students are required to be susceptible to a wide range of information. It is said that one of the main contributions of travelling or errand is that students will have this golden opportunity to learn how to socialize with other people and how to face challenges. What errands does is to spur students to fulfill their innate desire of socializing, as well as encountering with some setbacks and impediment happing on a trip. In addition, studying so hard at school for at least 12 years, students deserve to chill out for a while so as to gain their energy back. So arduous is the university entrance exam that pupils entail taking some rest after the high school. Consequently, disengaging from study for a while is mandatory to students to make a decisive decision about their future.
By and large, for the good of the students, they should have this chance to gain more knowledge and skills, as well as take some rest and meet other people after high school instead of following their education immediately.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: Because
...ve higher education in the years ahead. Because of the fact that many companies and enterprise would rat...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st-changing and competitive society. Another noteworthy and exquisite reason ...
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Line 5, column 725, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...udents deserve to chill out for a while so as to gain their energy back. So arduous is t...
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Line 7, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... following their education immediately.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, at least, in addition, as a result, as well as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85526315789 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7128531431 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.7136799314 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.235294118 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8235294118 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250416024852 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816000417169 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412037183729 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158021741543 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291650337848 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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