Tpo 8. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Addvertising is essential for providing people of any age with the latest or new products. It is thought by some people that adds that are directed toward children are a good way because children would get to know new interesting things. However, I personally believe that Television advertising should not be allowed direct to children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, children do not understand the meaning of advertisments that they might see. When kids see something, they would require it without thinking that much. On the other hand, children who are not exposed to these commercials will not insist of wanting something. My own experience as an aunt is a compelling example of this. About ten years ago, when my nephew was five years old, he was very curious and wanted to have everything on his hands. One time he saw an advertisement in television about an item that suposed to be used by mothers for their kids. After after the commercial ended, he wanted me to find that item for him. I tried to explain to him that it was difficult for me to finf that item, but he just insited by crying out all the time. If my nephew had not seen that commercial, he would have never asked for it. Because of this, I think that children should not be exposed to any kind of advertisments that are presented on television.
On top of that, regulations about the advertisements should be controlled by experts that know better about the impact that these adds will have on kids. When these adds are not thought carefully, then the impact may not reflect positively on kids. However, it is the parents responsibility to make sure what their children should watch. For instance, recently I read an article about a survey that was done a few years ago. The survey showed that 87 percent of parents were unhappy with adds that were not analysed by experts. In addition, they had required authorities to take actions to stop uncontrolled commercials. This supports the idea that if the advertising is controlled, the impact that these commercials would have on kids would be positive. Therefore, parents would be more informed which adds their children should watch.
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...ssential for providing people of any age with the latest or new products. It is t...
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...d to be used by mothers for their kids. After after the commercial ended, he wanted me to f...
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... that these adds will have on kids. When these adds are not thought carefully, th...
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... positively on kids. However, it is the parents responsibility to make sure what their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, kind of, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79480519481 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71663478789 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519480519481 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.6302876806 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.9090909091 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194364403222 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591259866793 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661570597307 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144444135577 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576806998728 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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