TPO13: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
The extended families are the people who help to have a better life for a person. Some people believe that the extended family is also important for people equally in the past. On the other hand, others think that the people pay less attention to the extended family nowadays. From my point of view, the value of people would not change despite how much time goes.
Above all, the pillar of life is first parents, second the extended family who are always in the back of every individual’s success. People may busy to not pay attention to them, however, it does not mean that the importance of extended family diminished. For example, some people even live and grow with their extended family because their parents are not ready to live themselves or they are too busy to take care of their children. I am not sure that the importance of people who always in your side would decrease someday.
Another reason is that the interaction between people and the extended family decreased, it does not mean that they care about them less than before. Nowadays, people spend more time on work than the past because of the rapidly developing technology world which causes to decrease the time of people to spend on their loved ones. For example, my mother used to spend most of her time with her aunt, however, now she has an own family which causes to meet her aunt rarely. But, they never forget about each other, they even care about more than before, when they meet the warm energy radiate from them.
To sum up, the importance of people cannot be measured. People take care of their extended family just like they do in the past because they are not the thing that's value is unstable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'decreasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: decreasing
...eveloping technology world which causes to decrease the time of people to spend on their lo...
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Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'meeting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: meeting
... now she has an own family which causes to meet her aunt rarely. But, they never forget...
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Line 5, column 465, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...wn family which causes to meet her aunt rarely. But, they never forget about each othe...
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Line 7, column 160, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...the past because they are not the thing thats value is unstable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21161328747 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493333333333 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1876166761 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6428571429 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195995379731 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837201306212 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508302362116 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133715823853 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195168577408 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 86.8835125448 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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