TPO14
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than foreign country.
It comes as no surprise that efforts to finding the preference of traveling inside and outside of country have been always among the top priorities. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether people benefit more when they travel abroad or the advantageous of traveling inside their country is more than foreign countries. I, to a great extent, concur with the idea that traveling abroad is much better than inside. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated by the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point that makes me hold this belief is that traveling abroad helps people to get familiar with the culture of people all around the world. It goes without saying that every country has its unique culture and traditions which is really interesting for people's from other parts of the world. People know about their culture by being in their own culture or by many communicational tools that exist in everyone's country like television, radio, but knowing about other cultures through this media is quite difficult and being in the environment helps people to figure out about different cultures. In my travelling to Iran, I got familiar with an exciting culture that I had never seen before. They celebrate the first day of spring by jumping from the fire for removing their sadness and sick. It was really interesting for me as a foreigner.
Another reason deserving some words here is that every nation has a distinctive language with which people speak and traveling abroad helps people to get acquainted with different languages. Learning various languages is really difficult unless being in close contact with the people from that language. Statistics show people who learn a second language in the environment are 86 percent more successful in learning than people who learn it by other ways like classes, videos and books. Perhaps a more specific experience can shed more light on the matter. From my childhood, I lived in a non-English languish country. But from my young ages, my parents forced me to go to different classes for learning English which is international language. I could not speak well English until I traveled to the United Stated last year. Since last year, my English language surprisingly improves because I force to use vocabulary and grammar to communicate with people and thing English not my mother language for speaking; thus, it helps me vocabulary and grammars imprint in my mind.
Finally, yet importantly, traveling abroad increase people's knowledge. Without any shadows of doubt, every country has its own history. History has important lessons for people which they can exert them in their daily life for preventing many predicaments and disasters. People who travel to foreign countries learn about different countries' history and makes them knowledgeable people. For example, last year I traveled to Iran and encountered many places damages by the flood. When I asked from local people about these disaster, they proposed, extensive removing of forest's trees for changing the forest area to residential area caused this phenomena. Roots of trees that absorbed huge amount of water were removed and flood causes irrecoverable problem in that areas. After that, I figured out that removing trees is really dangerous for both people and environment.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned paragraphs, one can soon realize that travelling abroad is much better than inside since not only can people get familiar with other cultures, but also they can learn different languages and they can learn many invaluable lessons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...foreign countries learn about different countries history and makes them knowledgeable pe...
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Message: Did you mean 'this disaster' or 'these disasters'?
Suggestion: this disaster; these disasters
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... forest area to residential area caused this phenomena. Roots of trees that absorbed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, regarding, second, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3059.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 585.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22905982906 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69440645371 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 293.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500854700855 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 934.2 618.680645161 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9757614385 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.296296296 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40740740741 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234901694788 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675553430917 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700190656823 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13779476897 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798154860978 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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