TPO18(independent)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
It is widely accepted that children are influenced by people in their lives. From their infant age, parents influence them and when they get older, their friend, relatives, teachers and so on have potentioal to influence them. Some people may believe that kids are influenced by their friends. However, others have the idea that their teachers influence them more. From my point of view, I think that teachers are more effective because kids count on them as a source of knowledge and also they are older. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my view point by expanding my reasons.
Given the reasons, children admire their teachers because they think that teachers are a source of information and knowledge. Most of the time, children ask some question at home but their parents or siblings have no answer to their questions. however, they ask the same question in class and their teacher has a reliable answer to them. For example, my younger brother asked a question about solar system and unfortunately no one in the family has an answer but, the day after, he came back from school while he was admiring his teacher because his teacher had answered his question. Since then, my brother imitates his teacher's behavior, and it was very interesting for us.
Furthermore, children are always looking for a help from older persons or always they are asking to do some affairs because they don't have ability to do their own activities or because of lack of decision-making ability. I think that this point makes children to influenced by the older people like their teachers. i.e. Their friends have the same issue when facing the peoblems and they don't ask their friends to help them. I remember my childhood, as an example, I never asked my friend to help me with my mathematic problems because they had the same issue with their problems. this point persuades kids to hear from older persons like their teachers.
To have a conclusion, I think that children are influenced by their teachers more than their friends. The teachers are admired by kids because they are full of information and also their teachers have more ability to handle the childrens issues. As matter of fact, a child's friends have the same problems as the child has so they can not be a reliable person to imitate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, look, may, so, then, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90379746835 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51684789242 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437974683544 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2454544267 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.947368421 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282836443395 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125667854272 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906306652549 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203489548738 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055151173025 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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