TPO25 – Independent: A/D? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to help their communities.
In this crowded and rough world, time is the most important thing which everybody can have. There is very vast controversy that young persons spend their time enough to be helpful for their society. Whether or not I, personally speaking, wonder that they don't vigorously care about the social works. In what follows, the reasons to support my viewpoint are vindicated.
The first and significant reason is that they prioritize their works, and the works related to the community are the last one. To put it into a vivid picture, they strive to make money to make their dreams and wishes true, hence, they have no time for expensing in this way by working in the workplace. The next example can make this statement crystal clear. my father always works in his office ten hours a day to provide abundant facilities for me and my brothers. hence, he occasionally involves into the communities. In contrast, my uncle, who is the richest man I've ever seen, is always into these kind of deeds.
Furthermore, young people often want to be involved in fun and excited works. Unfortunately, no longer does a young human go into the society peoblems to help them solved. it is clear that everyone wants to have fun time in their young age years; such as games, sex, trips and so on. Although, caring people do these kind of thing, but the main and considered part of their life is their society circumstances. For instance, comparison between me and my best friend named Rosa shows to everyone the claim which I declared. She always wants to go shopping even in the bad and awful economical conditions of Iran which made all of us not to do purchuse anything, in contrary, I always complain about econimical problems because I know all the people can't affort their living costs, and it doesn't mean I don't like shopping or something like that.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, I believe that young people do not give enough time to help their communities. I believe in this way because of making money and excited works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...enough to be helpful for their society. Whether or not I, personally speaking, wonder that the...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., personally speaking, wonder that they dont vigorously care about the social works....
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: My
... can make this statement crystal clear. my father always works in his office ten h...
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Suggestion: Hence
...dant facilities for me and my brothers. hence, he occasionally involves into the comm...
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Line 3, column 568, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: I've
...trast, my uncle, who is the richest man Ive ever seen, is always into these kind of...
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Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...chest man Ive ever seen, is always into these kind of deeds. Furthermore, young people o...
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Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...e society peoblems to help them solved. it is clear that everyone wants to have fu...
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Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...s and so on. Although, caring people do these kind of thing, but the main and considered p...
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Line 5, column 582, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...o go shopping even in the bad and awful economical conditions of Iran which made all of us...
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Line 5, column 749, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... problems because I know all the people cant affort their living costs, and it doesn...
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Line 5, column 788, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... cant affort their living costs, and it doesnt mean I dont like shopping or something ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...heir living costs, and it doesnt mean I dont like shopping or something like that. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76123595506 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5699100317 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564606741573 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7700057874 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1666666667 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276974633886 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838121845074 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117761240873 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19442937357 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103813502156 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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