TPO44 independent essay

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TPO44 independent essay

In this crowded world, it is important to have some persons who you can trust and want to spend your time with. some people believe that it is best for busy parents to spend their time with their children using games and sports. On the other hand, there are some people who think in an opposit way. personally, I am of the opinion that it would be great if parents use games and sports in their parents-children time. I believe in this way for some reasons which I would explain in this essay.

First of all, children are at school in the most time of the day, and they usually do their homeworks after school. Therefore, they usually free when they see their parents after work. it would be boring if their parents spend their time with them by doing homeworks, and as a result they would prefer to not share their time with their parents and be alone. it is abviously more fun for them to play games and sports. As an example, one of our professors told us one of her experiences in a research. The research was about commiunications between parents and children. She explained that there was a family whose son always wanted to be alone. Then, my professor found out that he didn't like to involve his parents in his free time because they always wanted him to do their works which were related to his school, but he wanted much more fun time.

Furthermore, playing games or sports can make parents and children more close to each other because children would love persons who play with them more than others. To make it clear, I used play with my mom when I was a kid, and I wonder that's why I am closer to my mom than my dad.

Finally, doing serious deeds like homeworks can make children scard of their mom and dad, and it can pursue a couple of significant consquences like physical and mental problems. As an illustration, I saw a lot of kids who had several problems just because they were scared of their parents and families when I used to work in an orthotics clinic.

In conclusion, I believe that it is the best for both parents and children to share their time by playing games and sports to have healthier kids, and be closer to their children

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...trust and want to spend your time with. some people believe that it is best for busy...
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...ome people who think in an opposit way. personally, I am of the opinion that it would be g...
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Suggestion: research
...ssors told us one of her experiences in a research. The research was about commiunications...
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...h my mom when I was a kid, and I wonder thats why I am closer to my mom than my dad. ...
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... and families when I used to work in an orthotics clinic. In conclusion, I believe that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43107769424 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35339013134 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456140350877 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0998982351 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2222222222 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00951489221071 0.236089414692 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00502356744548 0.076458572812 7% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0207126991951 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00575484630375 0.150856017488 4% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0115096926075 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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