TPO44 independent
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In our new modern world, people are getting busier because of competitive occupancies. Because of that, they have less free time to spend with their children. It is important to dedicate this time efficiently. While some people hold the view that it is better to have fun playing games or sports at that time, I am of the opinion that parents should devote that time to do school-related works with children. In the following essay, I will vindicate my stance through two noticeable reasons.
To begin with, parents should have continuous reports about their children's status at school. Sometimes, schools do not have enough inspiration to students and they cannot recognize their faults. If the parents join the children in doing schoolwork, they will have more feedback about academic life and they are more able to correct the initial wrong way. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Both of my parents were working in a company. They had few time to spend with me. But, they had been devoting their time to my schoolwork. So, they knew my conditions and my situations at school. They had corrected my mistakes and pushed me in an outstanding way. Now, I am a Biomedical Engineer in one of the biggest companies in the country and it’s all because of their participation in my schoolwork.
Secondly, if the parents emphasize more on schoolwork by dedicating their free time to that, children will understand the importance of school and school-related works. Parents do not have enough time to tell children about the advantages of school, but they can devote all their free time they have to schoolwork. By doing so, children are always aware of schoolwork even if the parents are not with them. For instance, my father taught math to me after work. I was interested in math and also I was trained about the importance of math assignments. That action made me so serious about math even at college and university.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon understands that it is better for busy parents to spend their free time doing things that are related to schoolwork with children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
...nts were working in a company. They had few time to spend with me. But, they had been d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13535911602 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04896424404 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527624309392 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.7102131341 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8421052632 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289051327052 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105819508406 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956788843124 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22516787809 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621632663362 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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