Tpo30
The ever-increasing prominence of work time has aroused the long-lasting controversy as to whether work for longer hours in week or for shorter hours.Although many people adhere to the idea that shorter work hours is more efficient. Since it helps that employee's randemon increases.I resoultely posses the conviction that working three days a week foe long hours is much more better.In the following paragraphs, the most outstanding reasons will be explicated.
The first reason that supports my perspective is concerned with the fact that working only three days a week provides enough leisure time for the employees. In fact, they have enough time to take rest as well as being with their family.Most of the people work for more than five days a week are separated of their social life and just sink into their career lives.take a personal experience as an example, my uncle has worked in a company for two years. Since he was a head-manager he did not have time to spend with his family. After a while, his wife asked for divorce which effected badly on my uncle's job as well.
Another note worthy point to be mentioned is that when the employees are exhausted, their work performance decrees which lead to low efficiency at all. Therefore, business can climb the labor progress sooner if they employee work for shorter period of time in week.Indeed, it increases the teamwork effecency.From my view point the result is attributed to the fact that when member of group work effectively, the entire group utilize it.
In brief, the contemplating all the a foremention reason lead us to the conclusion that working for three hours a day for longer time is better than working five days a week in short time. The more the employee rest, the better their jobs consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...as aroused the long-lasting controversy as to whether work for longer hours in week or for sh...
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Suggestion: Although
...nger hours in week or for shorter hours.Although many people adhere to the idea that sho...
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nger hours in week or for shorter hours.Although many people adhere to the idea that sho...
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...t shorter work hours is more efficient. Since it helps that employees randemon increa...
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...helps that employees randemon increases.I resoultely posses the conviction that w...
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...week foe long hours is much more better.In the following paragraphs, the most outs...
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...rest as well as being with their family.Most of the people work for more than five d...
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... has worked in a company for two years. Since he was a head-manager he did not have t...
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...y on my uncles job as well. Another note worthy point to be mentioned is that when the ...
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...ooner if they employee work for shorter period of time in week.Indeed, it increases the teamwo...
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...work for shorter period of time in week.Indeed, it increases the teamwork effecency.Fr...
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...ed, it increases the teamwork effecency.From my view point the result is attributed ...
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...it. In brief, the contemplating all the a foremention reason lead us to the concl...
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...st, the better their jobs consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, in brief, in fact, in short, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92026578073 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80347100483 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554817275748 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.0649736152 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.1 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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