TPO34-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children today, are more than ever involved in the advancements of technology. But could these technologies be hindering their education? There are compelling arguments on both side. I personally subscribe to the view that the overall impact of technology on children has been positive.
First of all, with the advent of social media such as Facebook and Twitter, children can take advantage of socializing with their peers all around the world. This way, they can exchange ideas on various topics, thereby developing the ability of critical thinking - which is a primary goal of any kind of education. This would benefit students as they grow up. A recent survey has disclosed that employees tend to set strict criteria for hiring employers. They expect job applicants to have not only specialization in their majors, but also the ability of critical thinking - which would not result from the old methods of communication.
Moreover, education officials have devised softwares to amend the quality of education. I recently saw in a documentary that education is on the verge of a revolution; new softwares consider personality traits, skills, and the pace of learning of each individual student, and set a schedual for him accordingly. This will enhance the efficiency of education. Besides, it provides the students with the opportunity of having their assignments checked online by their teachers, anytime during the day.
However, there is another side to the debate. Children can easily be distracted from concentrating on their school work or even become isolated from their families and finally get anti-social. Nonetheless, none of these potential harms have been directly proven through scientific evidence. Future research may cast light on these aspects.
Having considered all these arguments, I believe that the the negative impact of technology on children's education has been exaggerated. If used in the right way, technology can benefit students in numerous ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42258064516 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93828806207 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61935483871 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.7702146476 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4736842105 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3157894737 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.099815037166 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290626233765 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035751712783 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557646781084 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272212769219 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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