tpo40/ do you agree or disagree that parents give money to school-age students when get high grade.
Young people are the most important part in the society. Our children are the futture of this world, leaders of the new generation, and the most valuable part in our lives. Parents used a lot and differents ways to improve their children to study hard. One of these ways is giving them some money as a promation way to push them to do better in their studies.Howover, some parents think that giving some money to school-age children spoil them. Personally, I concur with parents who like give money to their children to incourge them when they get high grade at school. I believe this way for number of reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, giving money to school-age children when they are getting high grade, that will incourage them to study hard. This kind of study will help them how to do their assignment with deep understanding. As a result, the deep analysis behavoir can grow inside them as a perment habit. No one can deny who this habit is beneficiat for everyone to be succeeful and excel in their majors.My own experience is a compelling exampeling example of this. When I was in elementary school. I was not that very good student. Most of my scores are average. However, when I was getting any high score, my father was given me one or two dollars as way to incourge me to keep getting good grades. For this I start studing harder day after day. Eventually I adapted this habit. At the university I gratuated with honor. This is because the deep understanding and hard work became my way in studying any thing. Thanks to my father money promotions which help me to become quite successful person.
On the other hand, it is true that giving some money to students it could spoil them. Some students become selfish more showy. Later, giving a lot of money students can help to adapt dependent sense inside them. Howevery, students who get some amount of money,which thing help them to learn how to save money and how spend it wisely. Later, in their lives they learn that what they need or what they what they came by saving money. This is means they have to work hard and gain that money to get these thing they get used to it. As I mentioned above. the money that I was got it from my father, I was spend it to buy all stuff that I need. AS a result, I learned that if I want to get what I want I have to study hard and be successful in my work to reach my goal.If my father had not given me some money to incourge me, I would not have learned how to gain money to live luxury life.
In conclusion, I believe that perants who are giving some money to their school-age children are doing the good for them. This is because moeny promotion can help students to study with deep understanding to getting high grade. and to help students to learn how to gain money and save.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.443378119 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41514111358 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408829174664 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9437443854 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6774193548 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8064516129 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16129032258 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275699457618 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786509805116 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900653992816 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211186070647 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531525894285 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.61 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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