TPO44-Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

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TPO44-Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and progressive world where we live,parents work so much and they have less time to spend with their children's.Recently,there has been a hot debate between people whether parents use their short free time to play and have fun with their kids or doing tasks that related to schoolwork.From my perspective,I prefer to parents play and have fun with their kids in their free times.On the countless reasons and examples,I will present the most essential and conspicuous ones here.

To begin with,playing games or sport is nature of the kids.The always want to play and have fun,so they always looking for someone to play.It is possible that find friends who are bad person.parents must spend their free times with kids and play game and sports with them,so they don't have to play with others.My personal experience is compelling example of this.When my cousin was 17 years old,his parents always was working,and didn't spend time with him to play games and sports.therefore,everyday he went to play yard and play with other kids.There was an adult man there.He always talked with children's and gives them candies,so children's like him so much.One day,after the game,he approached to my cousin and gave him candy and started to talk.Days passed away,they got closer and was spending so much time with each other.One day I was sitting at home with my family then the phone did rang.I answered the phone,my uncle was at the other side of the line.he told me to come hospital and he was crying,So we went there.My cousin was on the bed.when we asked them to what is happening,his father told us that an adult man give him candies that has drug inside it.Consequently,if his parent spend their free time to play and have fun with him,their kids never went to play yard to play with other kids and met with bad guys.

last but not least,parents can teach new things to their children by playing game and sport.For instance,when parents have free time,they can go with theirs kids to sport yard and teach them how play football.With this method they can spend time with kids and teach them something new,and emotionally support them.Moreover plying football is also good for children’s health.They muscles get strong and their body shape get better or they brain will work more functionally.

To wrap it up,I prefer to parents allocate their free times to children’s to play games and sports rather than do things that related to their school works.

because by doing that they can take care of their children and don't let to play with strangers.also,they can teach them new skills with playing with them.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, for instance, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98214285714 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.001776552 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506696428571 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 89.0 20.1344086022 442% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 427.917281726 48.9658058833 874% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 446.4 100.406767564 445% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 89.6 20.6045352989 435% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.6 5.45110844103 341% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 54.0 5.5376344086 975% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339853559315 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.222144422441 0.076458572812 291% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652437736659 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222144422441 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652437736659 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 46.8 11.7677419355 398% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.94 58.1214874552 -3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 35.6 10.1575268817 350% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.79 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.94 8.01818996416 136% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 10.002688172 280% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 37.6 10.0537634409 374% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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