TPO46-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there is no shortage of debate about the importance of the opinions of celebrities to a wide range of people. Some people believe that the opinions of the famous persons are important everybody. I personally think that these opinions matter to young generation more than to old people. I feel this way for some specific reasons whcih I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, young people have not much experince and when they face and issue the usually do not have any previous knowledge and understanding on that issue. Additionally, when people do not have enough information about something they look up to persons that they love for some peace of advice. Obviously the fans of celebrities are mostly young and as a result young people cares more about their opinions.
Secondly, older people have tried many things and have been in many situations. When they face a problem they already had similar experince, therefore they are confident and they will not look for advice and others' opinion even if those others are famous entertainer or athletes. For example, my father is sixty years old and he runs a circus. Last week there was a lecture about success, the lecturer was a famous entertainer; He noted that in any career you should be hard on your employees to succeed, But since my father had experinces years ago about treating his staff, he disagreed to lecturer's opinion regardless of how famous he was.
Finally, from psychological point of view, young generations are most influenced by celebrities. Scientists stated that this happens because younger people are not mature enough and they can easily be persuaded by famous persons. For instance, my younger brother is a teenager and he loves Brad Pitt. Last month Brad Pitt had a charity festival to help the kids in Africa, the fesival was far away from our home but since my brother cared about that actor's opinion a lot ,he made the whole family to participate in the festival.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 451, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'actors'' or 'actor's'?
Suggestion: actors'; actor's
...e but since my brother cared about that actors opinion a lot ,he made the whole family...
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Line 7, column 471, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er cared about that actors opinion a lot ,he made the whole family to participate ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89285714286 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5869173624 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565476190476 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.891018322 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.6 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233471380748 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756804798197 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452811915767 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136496684162 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521184830056 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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