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This is indisputable that the government investment on the subject could provide a remarkable champion for them to improve. In this regard, some people are on the belief that the government should spend money to enhance internet access. Although, others hold the point of view that it is important the government invests in improving public transportation. Personally, I advocate the notion that the development of public transport is a more important issue for investors.
To begin with, nowadays, traffic is one of the major problems that the government confronts with. Big and crowded cities suffer from an enormous number of cars that make heavy traffic. In order to solve this problem, enhance public transportation seems a reasonable and long-lasting solution. It is worth mentioning that wasting the time important consequence of traffic which leads to exhaustion of them. by improving the ways to commute the time and energy that individuals lose in the traffic significantly reduce. therefore they could save more time and be more efficacious with a better outcome in the day. In addition. declination in traffic, not only prevent misuse the time and energy but also help the cities to be more organized and give them discipline. Subways are an excellent example of expanding public transportation. They have an undeniable impact to minimize the time need to spend on commute.
secondly, massive traffic and lack of adequate infrastructure for public transportation, prompt to increase air pollution. Should the pollution increase, the overgrowth of diseases like asthma will occur. Moreover, unhealthy air is detrimental for sensitive groups including the elderly and children. Recently, research conducted by the public health department in my university, revealed that air pollution has a dangerous effect on mental health in kids. Therefore, public transportation is pivotal for a big city that confronts air pollution in respect of have a healthy environment for people. Improve the commute ways result in reduce the need for personal cars and fewer air pollutants, consequently. Furthermore, if air-condition becomes unhealthy that could harm people and increase the rate of disease, the financial burden that the government should pay for treatment will rise and it could detrimental for the economy of the country. Regarding this issue, The more improved public transport, the more healthy and prosperous society.
In conclusion. according to the aforementioned reasons. I conquer with this idea that the investment government's money on improving public transportation. If the commute ways enhance, the traffic will reduce which leads to inhibit time and energy wasting. In addition, by better public transportation, air pollution decrease, and society will be healthier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 8.0752688172 409% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52214452214 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11296088648 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505827505828 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.096922591 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.76 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.16 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.48 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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