Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. Your essay will be judged based on the
quality of your writing. This includes the development of your ideas, the organization of your essay, and
the quality and accuracy of the language you use to express your ideas.
You have 30 minutes to plan and complete your essay.
Your local government has just recently received a large donation from an anonymous donor to improve
the community. Almost everyone agrees that the money should be invested in building a new public
facility. Which of the following do you think your local government should build?
- Build a public library
- Build a public park
- Build a public pool
Use specific reasons and examples to support your essay. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use
memorized examples.
There’s no shortage of opinion on what does the local government should build. In my personal opinion, having a public pool is the best choice out of the three provided facilities. This is for two main reasons I will explore in the following writing.
First of all, swimming is one of the best ways to stay healthy proved by scientist that swimming is the only sport to have your whole body’s muscles to move at once, This movement build muscles in a healthy way. Take my experience as a good example of this, two years ago when I break my leg my doctor told me to exercise daily to get my leg back to normal, but that took me a lot of time without really noticing any significant change, so I went to another doctor he showed me a better way to get better again which was swimming, of course swimming immediately after getting out of the hospital is bad, but if you can after some time do that you will notice the changes really quickly, so after two weeks of swimming I really felt so much better and I could even walk better than before.
Furthermore, having a public pool is better for those who can’t or not motivated to pay for private ones, so having a free one will at least introduce them to some of the pros of swimming so they will have better healthy life. This is another example, after having my leg recovered I told one of my friends to try swimming but he refused even though I told him that swimming is really helpful for our bodies, he said that he don’t know how to swim and won’t pay for nothing, so I thought If it was a public pool he would’ve at least tried it with me and probably liked it. So having a public pool means a lot people will get to know more about swimming.
In conclusion, I would recommend that my local government build a public pool. Swimming is one of the best ways to stay healthy. I also think having public pools will introduce more people into swimming and I encourage everyone to swim.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: There's
Theres no shortage of opinion on what does the...
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Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...the local government should build In my personal opinion having a public pool is the best choice...
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Line 2, column 192, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ove at once This movement build muscles in a healthy way Take my experience as a good example of...
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Line 2, column 391, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l but that took me a lot of time without really noticing any significant change s...
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Line 2, column 779, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and I could even walk better than before Furthermore having a public pool is bett...
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Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...g a public pool is better for those who cant or not motivated to pay for private one...
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Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ree one will at least introduce them to some of the pros of swimming so they will have bett...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... helpful for our bodies he said that he dont know how to swim and wont pay for nothi...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: would've
...so I thought If it was a public pool he wouldve at least tried it with me and probably ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, really, so, at least, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.22465753425 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23361446758 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476712328767 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 365.0 20.1344086022 1813% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1542.0 100.406767564 1536% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 365.0 20.6045352989 1771% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 95.0 5.45110844103 1743% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0601318952663 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601318952663 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0406474724339 0.150856017488 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126950050566 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 180.9 11.7677419355 1537% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -273.62 58.1214874552 -471% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 142.1 10.1575268817 1399% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 8.68 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 23.3 8.01818996416 291% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 36.0 86.8835125448 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 10.002688172 520% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 148.0 10.0537634409 1472% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 148.0 10.247311828 1444% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.