Visiting Museum

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Visiting Museum

The culture is the spirt core of the country, the only way we can familiar with the country is familiar with their country first. Nowadays, a popular debate had been proposed on the internet: Visiting museum wheather is the best way to learn about a country. Some people believe museum is the essence of their culture; But from my perspective, I don't think it is the best way, I believe musemum only can represent for a small part of the culture of their country. My views and reasons are given below.

Firstly, the culture exhibited from museum only represent for the history of their country, but it can't show the current culture with the time change. To be more specific, as an old saying going, "Thirty years ago we live in east of the river, after thirty years we live in west of the river." Time always change some things hugely. So, the exhibits in the museum will misleading the current impression of one country. For instance, in National Japanese Museum, it conclude for their tea culture from some elegant tea cup or teapot. All those things decipt a culture with the life of slow rhythm and non-pressure. But, nowadays, Japan become the most pressureful country in the world with the quick rhythm, they don't even have rest of the time to taste for the tea. So, the culture in before is totally diferent from our world. It will help people to learn the past of the country, but not the reality.

Secondly, the exhibits in the museum only can represent for part of their country, the most valueble sprit or physical treasures are live in the folk. People always say:"Food is the bread of the people". But we can't taste food from the pottery with thousands years history. Therefore, I believe walk in to the folk, and stay with their traditional people, is best way to learn about a country. For example, before I went to US, I had already taken the AP course of Amrica history, which forced me to recite the important time or landmark of Amrica. I was already know the superface of their country, that how America formate to a country. But after I live in a black people's homestay for 1 month in Boston , I found that how their culture beautiful is, such as the underground hip-hop, and their folk-custom. It taught me that the most attractive things was talking with their native people, who live here for the whole life. Then, I thinked I really understand the valueble part of their culture.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.668997669 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48515440734 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475524475524 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1690701472 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.380952381 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112058195789 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369434569945 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680754899974 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884698467107 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518671958501 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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