When famous people such as actors, athletes, and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether people should follow well-known people when they give their opinions toward some events or not. Personally, I think people have to take information or knowledge from experts no matter what happens. If entertainers are expert in the field that they are talking about, people have to listen to them.
To begin with, when people listen to famous entertainers who are expert in their field, they would get the whole benefits from them. They will hear the correct and the most accurate information about the situation. For example, when Mohammed Ali had a TV interview about boxing, he gave some critical points about how people can succeed in boxing. He said that the first step is to practice your hand to be swift and anyone who wants that he\she has to have the commitment with daily training. Nowadays, the champion of the UFC Khabib has very fast hands, and he is able to defeat many people by this skill. Khabib said that he had listened to Mohammed Ali interview when he was a kid, and he followed what he said about boxing. Obviously, Khabib would not succeed in his boxing, if he did not listen to the correct information from the expert Mohammed Ali.
However, when people take the information from some celebrities who are not expert, they will have negative consequences. For instance, my nephew Lama is an overweight person, so she tried to overcome this problem by listening to some celebrities on the Instagram application about obesity. One day she used some pills that the famous celebrity Kim Kardashian advised her fans who are obese to use. Thus, she had a critical illness from using these bills because she took the information from the wrong person.
In conclusion, people should listen and follow people who give opinions in the field that they are expert in. However, if they are not expert, individuals should not listen to them at all.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: wants him to
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Suggestion: celebrity
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the information from the wrong person. In conclusion, people should listen and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82175226586 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47124738642 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513595166163 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.9986164966 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.75 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192380970529 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769202262655 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627808909479 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144989771564 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054382496984 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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