When a new technological device becomes available, some people buy it right away; others wait until many have adopted it. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, with the rapid development of the economy and technology, there is a plethora of new technological devices released on the market. Attracted by their fashing design, some consumers prefer to buy them as soon as they are available. However, from my perspective, I strongly believe that it is better to wait until many have adopted them because of the potential risk of new products and the bad consumption habit we might develop.
Usually, without plenty of practical examinations, newly released technological products may have a number of hidden problems, so it will be quite risky to purchase them right away. Take my experience as an example. Once I was hit by the fancy advertisement for a cell phone which would be opened to the market in a few days, I ordered it on the Internet and paid the bill immediately with excitement. When I received the real object days after, I tested it carefully. Nonetheless, I found its performance far away from what is said in the advertisement and for me, it is far less than expected. Due to this awful shopping experience, I seldom make preservation for technological products anymore. In addition, there are many content creators focusing on providing reviews of new technological devices. By watching their videoes on youtube or somewhere else, we could get a quick overview of the information of that product and then make our decisions on whether or not to buy it.
It is an unhealthy habit to often purchase a new product which not only does harm to one's living quality but also their social credit. If one person always being unable to control his desire to purchase new things, he will tend to foster a bad consumption habit. Unfortunately, as long as such habit has formed, it will take a person a long time to make it right. In addition, such person may be a youth who does not own much wealth. As a result, he must lend money from someone else or banks. It is of high possibility that he cannot afford to return the money, which means his social credit will be greatly damaged. His future will also be destroyed.
For the reasons I mentioned above, I can safely draw the conclusion that it is better to hold the desire to buy a new technological product until others have tried it because of the risk we may take and the unhealthy habit we may cultivate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 956, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... product and then make our decisions on whether or not to buy it. It is an unhealthy habit ...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'being'.
Suggestion: being always
...also their social credit. If one person always being unable to control his desire to purchas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, then, as for, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71498771499 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82135785166 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552825552826 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1854089672 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173055709074 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460509648914 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426179015922 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114008383139 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502696670778 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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