Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Improving schools is the most important factor for the successful development of a country.
Recently, whether improving school is the most crucial factor for the successful development of a country has stirred a heated discussion. People's attitudes are divergent on such a controversial issue. Even though many people hold a positive attitude towards it, from where I stand, a contrary scenario is more likely, which can be substantiated by the reasons and examples listed as follows.
It takes us little imagination to foresee that other factors contribute more to a country's success, one of which is the economy. What lies behind it is simple. Most countries prioritize economic development, which means governments will collect more tax money as the economy boosts. Then, by allocating capital to infrastructure construction and public welfare can a country be recognized as successful. My home country, China, is an excellent case in point. Since the central government initiated the Economic Reform in the late 1970s, China has embraced high-speed economic growth in the past decades. The tax income in 2018, according to the National Bureau of Statistics, is approximately one hundred and fifty times greater than that in 1978. It was the increased fiscal income that made the infrastructure improvement possible. By 2018, the total mileage of high-speed railway in service reached 30,000 kilometers, more than two-thirds of the total mileage of high-speed railway in the world. Without sufficient funds, such achievement could be nothing but an illusion.
In addition to the economy, medical service and research are factors that lead a country to success. Medical service safeguards people's health. Its success is directly related to people's happiness which is an important indicator to evaluate a country's success. The COVID-19 pandemic serves as a perfect example to illustrate my point. We lived in fear of the virus due to a lack of understanding when the pandemic first started. Shortly after, the government-sponsored medical institutions led to remarkable breakthroughs in treatment research and vaccine development, making China one of the first countries to vaccinate the public. Vaccines offered strong protection to public health, effectively prevented infection, and stopped the disease from becoming severe. Therefore, life gradually returned to normal. Although there have been small-scale outbreaks, the happiness of Chinese people, I believe, is incomparable.
In a nutshell, based on what has been discussed above, I can safely conclude that improving schools is not the most critical factor for the success of a country. Economic and medical development should be taken into consideration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, therefore, third, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54975124378 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12601855879 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592039800995 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9827677566 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9583333333 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29166666667 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198251725213 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513756479419 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892727817449 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140044807501 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579562810029 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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