Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor for the successful development of a country?
Throughout history, none of the advancements and successes in societies have resulted from ignorance. This is what highlights the importance of educational systems in our modern world. Among several factors that contribute to the development of a country, improving schools is said to be the most crucial one. Although some people oppose this idea, I believe that for a country to flourish in all aspects, officials should refine schools in terms of quality, plus quantity their society for several reasons.
First, in my opinion, a country’s economy and the level of its schools are directly linked. The more high-quality schools, the more professional academic education, and the more adept people in a society to improve its economic situation. In other words, when a government invests more money on upgrading schools by doing appropriate measures, particularly recruiting more knowledgeable teachers and providing better equipment as well as technologies, they are providing more experts in different fields in their society. Therefore, these well-educated students not only can perform high-quality tasks in their future jobs but also can use their intelligence for expanding their country’s economic potentials so that more job opportunities become available. To illustrate a counterexample, a common feature among developing countries is the lack of decent school standards. Thus, adequate educational institutions may be the missing link that can guarantee economic development for these countries.
Furthermore, in all countries, there are quite a few deep-rooted beliefs that are inherited from the past generation to the modern community, some of which are unrealistic and wrong, including racial and sexual discrimination. Socially, a country cannot develop with such false beliefs. However, by boosting schools and the educational system, governments can increase public awareness of these subjects through educating the young. Acquiring knowledge usually gives people the opportunity to think outside the box. For this, students can get a better comprehension of these vital issues and spread this awareness to both their families and the next generations. Another social advantage of improving schools in a country is that, by increasing the number of schools in all regions, young people might have more chances to attend schools. By so doing, officials can equalize the social classes that originated from the absence of education.
To sum up, I endorse the idea that improving schools is the most major factor for the successful progression of a country because this issue affects all aspects of a country’s development, such as social and economic areas. Governments can enhance the conditions of their society by focusing on their educational institutions. It is undeniable that neglecting this issue can take its toll on a country’s future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2446.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61009174312 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11564144509 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561926605505 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2854874742 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.3 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229931089005 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714026488604 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685374738257 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155596089682 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418370198037 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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