When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
In a capitalist society is common to have economic cycles. When times are rough, reducing funding for specific activities are necessary to control the countries balance sheet. Often, education is one of the areas most affected when a country has a tight budget. Therefore, school board members must decide in which areas will have a cut. While some people believe that physical education should be the first class to go down, I believe that arts and music should be eliminated first. I support this opinion for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Being active is fundamental for our lives. General guidelines suggest that we should be in activity between 3 to 5 times a week. Having a physical education classes at school is important because it can help supply these guidelines that sometimes parents are not aware of it or do not have the time to take their children to an extracurricular activity. For example, when I was in middle-school I had physical education every day in my curriculum; thus, I was able to keep up with the physical activity guidelines. If I did not have the class at school, my mother would not be able to take me to a sport activity due her lack of time.
Secondly, art and music are easily reachable when you are out of school. Many cities offer music concerts or have art museums. Even if you are not able to go to these places, with the internet is possible to access all sort of music and art. For instance, my mother is an art aficionado, she is very knowledgeable about the history and the important names in this field. Therefore, when we would be driving to school, she would play in the car tapes of art history to educate me about this important activity. On the contrary, I would not be able to participate in a physical activity while my mother was driving. It is a class that requires you to go to a specific place and take your time to do it.
In conclusion, I think physical education classes should be always available at schools, even when there is a reduction in school funding. Keeping up with physical activity guidelines and having the classes available in schools are the reason why I believe in this way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, sort of, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64010282776 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65256020239 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485861182519 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.610094929 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.25 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415926216412 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119380950862 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104857245408 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263109701992 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595770436285 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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