whether or not societies rules related to the young to follow are extremely strict
Since the dawn of humanity, all societies were in the demand of considering some rules and laws to make themselves a better place to be lived. Todays, one of the heated controversies among people is that whether or not societies rules related to the young to follow are extremely strict. I, personally, subscribe to the idea that the very rules are not at all strict for young people. The societies' laws and rules provide the young with a good opportunity to live in a safe place. In addition, the very rules help them to broaden their perspective and be success.
To begin with, policy is a good way to keep a society away from violence and criminals. In this regard, if a society familiarizes their young dwellers with such an advantage of rules, the young generation will not see these rules as strict ones. I think in this modern life that news and political decisions all around the world spread easily throughout the internet, all people are aware about the reasons that why a rule was adopted, why they must follow it, and so forth. Besides, most societies have referenda to consider inhabits' opinion about a new rule, in fact, people participate to make a new law. All these happening make young people aware about benefits of rules, and they are enthusiastic to follow the rules. It is not to mention that young people are in the head of a society and sometimes they force governments to adopt a new rule. Such an occurrence approves that the rules excepted to be obeyed by young people is not strict, if it was, young generation wouldn’t propel governments to consider a new law. An example can drive this notion home, university students in Iran have recently complained against the weakness of roads rules which have caused many accidents in Iran. They wanted to increase fines in order to decrease driving violations. It is good evidence that regulations are not strict for them.
Secondly, as we know young generation are hungry about figuring out merits and demerits in their cultures and countries. Since they aren’t equipped with enough wisdom which can be obtained via various experiences, they will become confused in the lack of societies rules. The very rules and regulations help them to have a proper list to follow in their lives in order to make their future success guarantee. For instance, a rule in Iran is that people have not to joint to gold quest group, a kind of network businesses. This regulation brings the young a priceless opportunity to avoid from a kind of business that languish their lives and economic conditions. If such a rule didn’t exist, young generation would probably engage in such an activity because of their high skill in the using of the internet. After a while they will become frustrated about their failure in the very business. Illegally of such a business in our country have increased the awareness of the young by which they can be more careful about opting for a job. In this line of thought, not only don’t rules annoy young people, but also young generations are improving their knowledge throughout obeying rules of the societies.
In summary, with all this taken into account, I do believe that rules that young people must follow in a society is not strict. Regulations guarantee their safety and their future successes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ated controversies among people is that whether or not societies rules related to the young to...
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Line 4, column 821, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...igh skill in the using of the internet. After a while they will become frustrated abo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, in summary, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 52.1666666667 171% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2749.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84832451499 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6198758778 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465608465608 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 877.5 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0046272479 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.730769231 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8076923077 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387837511308 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118227968515 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127569282849 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280392393457 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11672024076 0.0645574589148 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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