Which of the following values do you think is most important to teach a young child Being honest Being helpful Being patient | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Which of the following values do you think is most important to teach a young child?

Being honest
Being helpful
Being patient

Some people state that it is crucial to teach a young child to be patient because it is in childhood that the pupil will grow and he/she needs to be patient otherwise their parents will have hindrances in educating them. However, others believe otherwise. The latter thinks that kids should be able to demonstrate honesty and they should be helpful towards others. In my opinion, children should be taught to be honest and helpful. I feel this way as I will talk over in this article.
First of all, being honest is one of the most important quality that a kid may have. Dishonest children are hard to deal with because they all make mistake and we do not know if they are telling the truth or not. For example, my nephew in his childhood killed a bird but no one knew that he had made such a horrible thing and , also, he did not tell anyone about the situation. Therefore, this example elucidates the desideratum of teaching a kid to be honest even when it may seem hard to accomplish.
Moreover, another primal value to teach a child is to be helpful because once the little pupil learns it, then he/she will be able to help others in the future or he/she may be volunteer in his/her commune. For instance, my brother-in-law taught my two nieces in their childhood how to be helpful and now they are involved in volunteer programs for their community. Thus, this instance clarifies the necessity of teaching young children to be helpful.
Finally, I strongly agree that teaching kids to be honest and helpful are extremely important values because this way it becomes easier to deal with dishonest children and , also, young children can play one important role in the community by being volunteer.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 325, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sier to deal with dishonest children and , also, young children can play one impor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51532951974 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9456473345 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.923076923 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 5.45110844103 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446218385345 0.236089414692 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163274624747 0.076458572812 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117887261119 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288868633495 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736533710831 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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