Which of the following values do you think is most important to teach a young child?
Being honest
Being helpful
Being patient
It is critically important that we raise our children properly. Personally, I think it is very helpful to teach our children to be patient. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, patient children are more likely to overcome struggles at school. A student who is patient will not give up when they face academic challenges, and therefore they will learn a lot in all of their classes. My personal experience is an illustration of this concept. When I was in third grade, I had a lot of problems in my mathematics class. In particular, I just couldn’t figure out how to do long division correctly. At first, I wanted to give up and just quit doing my homework assignments. However, my mother encouraged me to be patient and try each question again and again until I found the correct answer. It took a long time, and I made a lot of mistakes, but thanks to my mom’s lesson I didn’t expect to get the answers quickly. This patient approach worked extremely well, and eventually I was able to master third grade math. If my mother had not emphasized the value of patience I still wouldn’t know how to do long division.
Moreover, children who are patient can develop financial skills at an early age. Most youngsters are given an allowance by their parents nowadays, but patience is required in order to save enough money to purchase expensive things they really want. Being diligent when it comes to money will teach children the value of saving and the importance of thriftiness. For instance, when we were kids my brother and I were both given ten dollars per week by our parents. Most weeks I just wasted that money on candy and comic books. My brother, on the other hand, wanted to get an expensive video game console so he spent nothing and just put his allowance into a bank account every week. After one year his patience had paid off, and he had enough money to buy the system. More importantly, he learned about the value of not giving into his immediate desires and how money can grow in time if we have the willpower to wait. On the other hand, I learned nothing and am still struggling to make correct financial decisions.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is a wise idea to teach children how to be patient. This is because it will help them achieve academic excellence, and it will help them become financially independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 854, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... I was able to master third grade math. If my mother had not emphasized the value ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, third, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in particular, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61627906977 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62766926276 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537209302326 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9079316403 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7083333333 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9166666667 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198063423184 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057835525312 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833384536614 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147855029083 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648876136818 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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