Recently, maintaining a well balanced life has became an increasingly important issue and whether it is wise to choose a job with regular salary and working hours or a job with high salary but long working hours has aroused heated arguments. People, nevertheless have contrasting opinions. Some people prefer to work long and accumulate wealth, while other people prefer to live a comfortable life. In my opinion, I prefer to have a job with regular salary and regular working hours because I believe enjoying life is more important than being wealthy. Also, excessive labor could cause serious health problems.
To begin with, I personally place greater emphasis on enjoying and experiencing new things and enjoying life rather than being rich. For me, nothing is more important than enjoying time with my friends and family. Even if I accumulate much wealth, if I have no time to relax and have fun, I won't be happy. For example, my friend is a doctor who works in an emergency room. He is highly paid, receives nearly twice the salary I earn, however he works nearly 19 hours a day. He always complains about how his work is tough and he has no spare time to have a break and spend time for leisure. Looking at him, I realized that nothing is more important in life is to be happy and comfortable. In contrast, I work in a small business, which I get paid not much but work 8 hours a day and weekends off. After work, I usually have time with my families or sometimes with my friends. Also, I utilize my time to read books and listening to music in order to relax and develop myself. Although I may not be rich, I feel happy and satisfied with my current life. Enjoying a relaxing life is my number one priority to me.
In addition, overworking is harmful for your health. According to the World Health Organization, health is defined as maintaining a complete physical, mental and social conditions. Overexertion could be detrimental in maintaining good conditions. I have seen on the news that the longer the working hours, it is more likely that employees will suffer from diseases such as obesity and scoliosis. Sitting for a long time will make your bones weak, and without sufficient exercise, it is difficult to maintain a good physical shape. Furthermore, people receive much stress during working. This will affect your mental conditions seriously. A recent survey indicates that many employees suffer from mental disorder which is mainly caused by excessive stress from the workplace. This will not only affect your mental state, but also your social life. Since overexertion causes such health issues, I would prefer to keep regular working hours.
In conclusion, I believe that having a job with regular working hours is a wise choice even though you get paid less. This is because I put more value into happiness and entertainment than wealth, and also excessive work affects your health. It is important to maintain balance between work and life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...y, maintaining a well balanced life has became an increasingly important issue and whe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2469.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86023622047 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64206596928 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488188976378 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8657558354 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9333333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357271553255 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844764196587 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133225864918 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251723653262 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158513839903 0.0645574589148 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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